CONTENT: Hello writer,
Thank you for making time to write my essay.
If you need to write more sentences please deduct the sources used.
I have attached the microsoft document edit version and would like you to fix the essay based on my comments on the side of the word document. I have downloaded the file as “PUBLIC HEALTH ISSUE”. please read and make the changes. All comments are added. And also read the « other » section comments thank you
OTHER: Overall interesting topic area to focus on cancer, an area that is often very medicalised. As such I see a lot of value in emphasizing the role of the social determinants of health.
Comments from Customer
PREVIOUS PAPER INSTRUCTIONS (#448297422): CONTENT: Hi, I have edited the first order of this essay. I have attached the microsoft document edit version and would like you to fix the essay based on my comments on the side of the word document. I have downloaded the file as “PUBLIC HEALTH ISSUE”. please read and make the changes. All comments are added.
OTHER: Overall interesting topic area to focus on cancer, an area that is often very medicalised. As such I see a lot of value in emphasizing the role of the social determinants of health.
Some brief thoughts:
I’ve suggested a few areas that need expansion
I’ve suggested a few areas to rearrange sentences to ensure flow when introducing new areas (ex: social determinants of health, with a focus on race)
The ending needs to end more with a ‘bang’. What’s the common thread? It needs to be weaved throughout the paper and her ending needs to reiterate her approach to address the SDHs as a public health professional
COMMENTS FROM PREVIOUS ORDER: PREVIOUS PAPER INSTRUCTIONS (#438634873): THIS ESSAY IS FOR WESTERN UNIVERSITY, MASTER OF PUBLIC HEALTH IN CANADA. I HAVE BEEN TRYING TO APPLY TO GET IN FOR TWO YEARS. I HAVE ATTACHED TWO THINGS. 1- Statement of Interest Instructions and the University question. 2- A SAMPLE of my Last year’s admission essay(which was not good). Please read the instructions on the document I have attached.
I have attached two things in the order. Please make sure you follow the instructions carefully. The instructions are from the advisor I spoke to for the university. Please read LAST year’s essay first to see the flaws and unclearness then proceed with the instructions of the essay. COMMENTS FROM PREVIOUS ORDER: Discipline: PUBLIC HEALTH
